Issue 58, 2 April 2002
In this issue...
Using a gerund phrase for procedure topic titles
Are chapter numbers necessary?
More on gender-neutral writing
New technical editing discussion group
Editing using Microsoft Word 2002 (XP)
New "Business Tips" section of my website
New book - Taming Microsoft Word 2000 now available
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Late last year, TECHWR-L members (http://www.raycomm.com/techwhirl/) discussed whether the title or heading for procedural topics should be gerund phases (for example, "Creating a New Document" or "Changing the Modem Settings") or some other verb form, such as "Create a New Document" or "To create..."
One person asserted that gerunds can be difficult for a translator or a non-native English speaker to understand. Others responded that while a non-native speaker with limited fluency in English might stumble over gerunds, they should not be a problem for a translator (and if they are, you need to find a new translator).
Several people did agree that starting the title with some verb form was a good idea, because it helps ensure that you're organizing your topics by tasks.
If you're writing for non-native English speakers, you might consider using the imperative or infinitive form rather than the gerund (and you'll probably want to simplify other aspects of the writing too). Just be sure that you consistently use whatever form you choose.
An aside: I've found that many writers who use gerunds for procedural topic titles or headings then feel obligated to use gerunds for *all* headings, for the sake of consistency or parallelism -- and that some editors enforce this requirement. However, I think it's unnecessary to use a verb to start a heading for a non-procedural topic, just so all the headings are in the same form.
This problem of heading parallelism was mentioned in an article titled "Artificial tasks or real tasks?" in issue 51 of this newsletter. Gretchen Hargis et al., in "Developing Quality Technical Information: A Handbook for Writers and Editors", discussed pseudo-tasks, headings that start with vague verbs such as "understanding" and "learning" and (sometimes) "using."
Responding to a question on the TECHWR-L list, I said, "If it's going to be printed or distributed as PDF (a sequential file), I think chapter numbers are a good idea, because people are used to them and expect them."
When I wrote that, I couldn't remember seeing a book-like document that didn't have chapter numbers *and* that was well organized and "worked" for me. Upon further reflection, I recalled some environmental impact statements and other reports that didn't have chapter numbers and didn't suffer in the least from the lack, but I wasn't thinking of them as "books" even though many of them are book length.
A day later, I saw a "book" that worked well without chapter numbers and, in fact, might well have suffered if chapter numbers had been present. That book is the PDF User's Guide for The HyperText Studio from Olsonsoft, http://www.olsonsoft.com/. Each chapter after the Introduction is a clearly-labeled stand-alone tutorial for one major output or feature of the program, and each chapter contains sections labeled "Lesson 1. xxxx" "Lesson 2. xxx" etc. The chapters aren't sequential; in many ways the book is like a collection of short documents.
So, as with most things in technical writing, the answer to the question "Are chapter numbers necessary?" is probably "It depends."
Jan Henning firstname.lastname@example.org read my article on TECHWR-L http://www.raycomm.com/techwhirl/magazine/writing/genderneutral.html and wrote to me with some comments. Here is our correspondence.
Jan: ... I don't quite agree with two details
in the article:
- You advise to not use "his or her" at all, putting it on the same level as, e.g., "s/he". I occasionally use the construct, and while I agree that it is not the most elegant, it may still be preferable to alternatives in a given situation. The key is, though, to use it very sparingly.
Me: Well, I did say "avoid," not "don't use," but I agree it would have been better not to group "he or she" with "he/she" and "s/he," implying that all those phrases are equally objectionable. Certainly "he or she" (and "his or her") may be preferable to the alternatives in some circumstances and are quite acceptable when used sparingly.
Jan: - You advocate the sentence "The successful applicant's skills will contribute to the commission's work in remote areas." I do not feel that this is good language: Skills do not contribute to work, persons do. You have avoided writing "his or her" or something similar, but the cost is, in my opinion, too high.
Me: It's a pretty poor sentence no matter how it's written, because it says almost nothing. Now that you point it out to me, I see that the word "skills" isn't necessary at all; one could say just as much (or as little) with "The successful applicant will contribute...," a phrase that talks about the person. Thank you for that insight!
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